A Computer Teacher Learning Humanity

By Team Inertia

Description: What if a computer was a high school teacher and only wanted to get his students into the best colleges? Original idea by Mae Story spine by Origami Alice We're also looking to working with more artists to flesh out the 3 acts of the story, as well as provide good drawings! (Current drawings done by Origami Alice, who can't draw...)

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Anonymous---
This is such an interesting story/concept! Teachers have such an impact on the lives of many. The story is clear and progresses well. My only note is that I'm not sure if the Computer teacher Adam or Halle is supposed to be the protagonist? I believe it should be Adam the way you have it set up? However, in the middle Adam is somewhat absent since Halle hacked him to change. So I think reworking that and making the protagonist clear will make the story stronger! The audience tends to like to see the protagonist overcome obstacles, so just something to keep in mind. But overall, great job!
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Anonymous---
It is an interesting story that deals with a much needed topic today. I especially liked the characterization of the professor with a rectangular head, indicating his grid mind, good point! Also the professor's eyes symbolizing the plus and minus symbol are very original details. I love that the students have managed to open the teacher's mind and heart and that he, in turn, has been inspired by them to guide them better in the future. I think the moral of the story is fantastic and very accurate, since we will all learn from each other, because at the end of the day, we are all students ;) Congratulations, Inertia! +++++++