johns life

Vague comments aren't helpful. They won't help the production and editing teams improve the video in any meaningful way. Hiding negative feedback in statements like “I'm not sure about this” or “it's not quite there yet” doesn't indicate actionable next steps.

Adding more detail and adding small details to tie back in at the end of the story would add depth and make your story better.

The story is funny and I didnt get the point at first and why he was kinda floating. But I got it when the one people were making fun of him.