Water Fairies

Hi Nanda, 😊 love the fairies. really nice story.

I Love this story; I relate to the message so much, seeing as I often feel like I'm creating art out of wanting to be the best in the world rather than for my enjoyment. I believe you found a great way to tell your story, and I love how the water fairies are mischievous but also secretly care about others, even if they have different ways of showing it. I love it when stories are personal, and you certainly nailed that feeling quite well. Honestly, there isn't anything wrong with your story, but may I suggest maybe having the faires cause more havoc and experimenting with the art supplies rather than just stealing them away from Josie? Other than that, great work.

Im in love of your works!!!!

Nice story spine. Seems like a clear progression of events, and the emotional range is broad. The ending is happy, and the moral is a good one. Your artwork adds so much. The colors are beautiful, and the way they seep into the fairies is perfect for watercolors, and the theme of your story. I enjoyed the character's faces and physical expression of emotion. If anything, I wasn't clear when she ripped up the pamphlet that she was quitting the exhibition. Maybe if she says something too as she rips it up, that would be clearer. Great work. This feels quite professional, from my very un-professional viewpoint.

I like very much the turn of events! That is a nice moral, it teaches us a lot. This element of the fairies disappearing is very clever, and since they are so special (their colors and light effects are pretty), if they appear for a short period of time, they become even more special. The story structure is clear, I can understand all the events and they make sense, even with all the details you put. Since you thought about the in-between scenes and how they connect, maybe you can exercise putting in the bold or just writing the part of the text that is actually the exact information of the story spine, to get most out of this exercise. For example, on your "until one day", for me it would be only the part of "she collected water from a waterfall (which was in fact filled with magic), and there were fairies in it which spilled her art supplies". And then you have the "consolidated" version and your current detailed version to consult both at the same time. In any case, what happens is clear. Maybe as an opportunity you can show why/how the fairies can think, so that we can understand the fairies can wish to help humans, and that they can think of plans like tsking the art supplies away. Otherwise, since they are playful and live in a deserted place, we wouldn't know if they would really care so much about the feelings of other humans. So if they are very friendly and can think of others, you can show that during the full version.

Hey Nanda, I love how you turned your cute little waterfairies-idea into a whole story. I think most people here will be able to relate to the frustration and the struggles of your heroine and while the story of the "blocked artist" sounds familiar those water fairies do make it special and I can imagine a lot of beautiful little moments with them. The story pretty much works for me as it is so I am a bit hesitant to make suggestions for tweaks and amendments at all but in the end I trust you to just pick the comments you believe to be helpful and simply ignore the rest. Here are some thoughts I had while watching your little clip: -That imagery you create with Josie painting in front of her tent which is pitched in some beautiful scenerey immediately catches me and sets up a really nice mood. -At some points in your story I was wondering how you are going to visualize what you at the moment are telling us via narration. The fact that Josie is creating art for some kind of expo which is important to her. The fact that the fairies steal her supplies because they think that these are the reason for Josies's bad mood. These all work in narration, I just find these quite hard to visualize them WITHOUT any text or narration. But maybe you already have something in mind for that... -The fairies playing with Josie's art supplies: On the one hand this feels like a key moment in your movie because it introduces the fairies and tells us who they are while also giving us some beautiful images to look at. On the other hand though this part of the film does not seem to really add anything to the story. It feels like you could just cut it out and let the fairies steal the supplies rightaway wihtout altering the overall story. So maybe there is a way to give some more impact on the fairies using the supplies? - that image of Josie crying in her tent with the torn expo flyer in the foreground and the tilted camera is awesome and feels very dramatic to me! I feel like the story could do with a bit more drama at this point to match this image though. Right now Josie has "just" lost her art supplies - maybe you can somehow raise the stakes a bit so it becomes clear that this indeed is the ultimate tragedy. Why is the expo so important? Why is there no more time to get new art supplies? Maybe you can even think of a reason why she lost the fun and lightheartedness in her painting in the first place and hint on that? - I totally understand the arc Josie is going through but I am just wondering whether she needs to play a more active role in it. Right now the fairies do push her in the right direction, I am wondering whether Josie herself needs to make some important and difficult decision at some point so in the end she "earns" her success? (that is exactly the problem I have with MY story at the problem so maybe I am oversensitive regarding this problem :P ) One final thought which might help with some of the stuff I mentioned: What if the fairies did not steal the art supplies but simply use them to paint OVER Josie's existing artworks? This way the scene with the painting fairies gets more impact, you do not need the theft any more, and the result is the same: Josie does not have any paintings she can use for the expo. I hope this all is somewhat helpful - as I said, the story already is pretty amazing as is and your beautiful drawings really help it come to life so I am sure it will turn out great even without you questioning and overthinking everything like I tend to do. I'm looking forward to seeing more of thse fairies!